Monday, April 30, 2012

blog 10


Shelia
Good Afternoon how can I help you?

tailynn
Well I'm new here and I just wanted to explore a little.

shelia
Wonderful. Welcome to the Innocence Observatory. This is the main observatory. From here you can go to Earth and solve your murder or you can watch trials. Either one you choose. We are open everyday, all day. There are two other observatories. One is attached to the Cafe that one is open only during the day and only for trial viewing the other is down that hall to the left and is for finding evidence and researching your murder only. Do you have any questions for me?

Tailynn
Actually yes. Is there any place I can go to just see how my family is doing?

shelia
Unfortunately no. That is not an option. You can see your family during your trial and sometimes when you are on Earth but you cannot go to Earth to visit them. That would be abusing the system and would result in Impeachment.

Tailynn
Okay thank you.

blog 9-


Dean
Good morning Tailynn. How are you doing today? Adjusting well?

Tailynn
Uh, yeah sure.

dean
Please have a seat we are waiting for one more then we will begin.
Have you guys met each other yet? This is Tailynn, Amari and Delilah.

The elevator doors open and in walks another girl. 
dean
Welcome Caitlyn! This is Amari, Delilah and Tailynn. 
Great so now that everyone is here we have some things to go over. First although the circumstances that lead to your arrival in Innocence are sad we try to keep as positive as an attitude as possible. We are all friends here and we are all in the same stressful situation. So lets keep the smiles plentiful and the tears for our pillows. How about we get to know each other a little better before we continue. We will take turns introducing ourselves. Just tell us your name, age, where you are from and your favorite thing to do. Amari want to start us off?

Amari
Hi, my name is Amari. I am from New York City, I am 15 years old and I like to play soccer.

Dalilah
Hello. I'm Dalilah. I'm 22 years old, I'm from Miami Beach Florida and I like to swim and play tennis.

Caitlyn
I'm Caitlyn, I'm 19 and I'm from Laurel, Montana. I'm a model, but I also like to take pictures and edit them. So like photography things.

Dean
Tailynn want to tell us about yourself?

Tailynn
Um yeah. I'm Tailynn I'm 18 years old and from Lincolnville Kansas. It's a small town, I bet none of you have even heard of it.

dean
And what's your favorite thing to do?

Tailynn
Nothing.

Wednesday, April 18, 2012

The Hollywood Formula- Innocence

Opening Scene- The movie will open with a girl reading a newspaper article about a murder in rural Kansas. The title of the article is “Beautiful 18 year old missing for 5 days, body found” There is a picture in the margin of the girl. She flips through the newspaper and then throws it down. Then the camera goes to mirror and there is a girl looking at herself in the mirror. It’s the same girl from the newspaper. She is fiddling with her outfit and hair. Twisting, examining her body. She then takes off her shirt switches to an oversized sweater and leaves her room. Walking down a hall you can see all the doors are similar except for the number and a few have pictures on them. She gets in an elevator and gets off a floor, enters a cafeteria with a sign that says Innocence Cafeteria.

Inciting Incident- Tailynn is called down to the Gavel Room to disucss with the Dean her failure to safely place evidence on Earth. The Dean gives her a punishment of 2 days in suspension. She has to report to a room every morning at 8 and stay there until 3 in order to ensure that she isn't traveling to Earth. While in this room she meets to girls, who have been murdered by the same guy and they start to bond. They make a pact to help each other and get their killer convicted.

Subplot- The screen closes on Tailynn falling asleep and opens on a dark garage. You see a girl laying on a raised silver table. You can only see her face. The face is pale and the lips are blue, showing the girl is not just sleeping but dead. Gloved hands brush her hair off of her shoulders and reveal her shoulders allowing the viewer to assume she is nude. The hands come back into the picture this time with a necklace. The necklace has a letter D on it and is placed on the girls neck. You can see a shadow walk to a closet and take out a pink blanket. The blanket is wrapped around the girl and her body is picked up. She is carried to a open trunk and placed in. He carefully lays her down and adjusts her necklace so that the D can be easily viewed. He brushes her hair back with his hands and then closes the trunk. The screens go black with the closing of the trunk and reopens on Tailynn in her bed again, the D necklace still adorning her neck.

Wednesday, April 4, 2012

Innocence Script Outline

Set Up- The movie will open with a girl reading a newspaper article about a murder in rural Kansas. The title of the article is “Beautiful 18 year old Missing for 5 days - body found” There is a picture in the margin of the girl. She flips through the newspaper and then throws it down. Then the camera goes to mirror and there is a girl looking at herself in the mirror. It’s the same girl from the newspaper. She is fiddling with her outfit and hair. Twisting, examining her body. She then takes off her shirt switches to an oversized sweater and leaves her room. Walking down a hall you can see all the doors are similar except for the number and a few have pictures on them. She gets in an elevator and gets off a floor, enters a cafeteria with a sign that says Innocence Cafeteria.
Inciting Incident- After feeling left out in school and hating her senior year of high school Tailynn looks to herself to find the answers to her misery. She feels like her problems stem from within and that she doesn’t have friends due to herself. She feels her family doesn’t love her and that she isn’t the daughter they had hoped for. She becomes insecure and when someone reaches out to her online she falls and falls hard for this boy. She decides to finally meet him after a few months of talking online. When they meet up she realizes he isn’t the 18 year old, blonde hair blued eyed boy her portrayed himslef as but rather a 45 year old mad with a plan to rape and murder her.
Rising Actions-
o   She learns about how Innocence works and how she can solve her murder. Through the administration on Innocence.
o   After many failed attempts at planting evidence she gets in trouble and is sent to “impeachment” (like a high school In School Suspension). While in impeachment she decides to talk to another girl, Ivy, who is also there with her. She ends up being another girl murdered by the same man. Ivy tells her there is another girl who has been murdered by them- 3 girls become friends
o   The girls work together on solving their murders for the police
§  Struggles with planting evidence and finding the right time to be on Earth
o   Starts spending a lot of time reflecting on herself and trying to find answers to her “problems.” Tailynn successfully plants enough evidence about her murder and is able to get her murderer to be arrested by the police. The police think they have a solid case and that he will be convicted in no time.
Climax- As Tailynn’s trial starts to get closer then the girls realize she will be leaving them soon. Tailynn realizes that she has finally found true friends and the prospect of her leaving Innocence and going to Heaven makes her realize that she doesn’t want to go. The girls unite to stall the murder trial so that the police can connect all the murders together and the man can be tried as a serial killer. They place two earrings, one from each girl, in the pocket of the pants that the police have in evidence. When the prosecutor goes to look at the evidence one more time while planning his case, he finds the earrings and connects the murders using the girls DNA found on the earrings.
Falling Action- The murder trial begins and the girls bond while watching the trial. At the end of the trial Tailynn’s mom talks about how much she loved her daughter and how important she was and still is to her. Tailynn realizes that she wasn’t as much of a screw up as she thought.
Resolution- The murderer is found guilty and the girls get to leave Innocence. As they load their things onto the world switching machine (elevator like) Tailynn realizes that although she was murdered her life after life in Innocence didn’t turn out that bad. She has friends and a family that she knows loves her and she will be able to be with someday in the future. Movie ends will the girls getting into the elevator together, holding hands and smiling. A man in a black suit tells them the elevator will go as soon as they command it to. Tailynn says on the count of three we say go. She counts down and the movie closes with the door closing and the three girls saying “go.”

Tuesday, April 3, 2012

Final Logline

An insecure murdered girl, stuck in a world between life and death, is forced to face her inner demons and solve her murder before another girl falls victim